花博絮語:從不請專業口譯到官網文宣菜英文——臺中宣言
花博又「花現」問題!
(「花現GNP」是花博宣傳口號 XD)
談談臺中市府官網宣傳《臺中宣言》的英文標題,見圖。
原版:累贅、不像樣的的台式菜英文:
《Taichung Declaration》has redefined the GNP Promote and raise the proposal for Green, Nature and People
設法順著原標題想表達的意思改成及格的英文:
The Taichung Declaration has redefined the pursuit of GNP growth in a new proposal of Green, Nature, and People
英文雖然對了,但仍累贅,沒有標題的樣子。
再改,使其精簡易懂,有標題樣:
The Taichung Declaration redefines GNP as Green, Nature, and People
最後這標題比較令人滿意,簡明、有重點、有哏。
* 重點明確:臺中宣言提出GNP新定義
* 明示GNP所代表的新名,但細節賣關子
* 藉此吸引讀者閱讀內文一探究竟
原標題在文法、寫作上的問題:
* 英文不存在中文新式書名號《……》
* 亂用動詞原形raise,不合文法
* 「GNP Promote」是啥?看似想表達「GNP提升」、「提升GNP」?就算視爲一個方案名,這也是糟糕的台式英文,正如Taiwan(,) Touch Your Heart 給人的感覺,無法端上國際。
問題出在把不合文法的動詞原形 promote、touch 一路用到底,不管意思如何,這顯示英語尚在牙牙學語階段,尚無動詞變化的意識和能力。
爲何 GNP Promote 是菜英文?進一步佐證:
請上 Google 搜索 "GNP Promote" (記得加英文引號),出現百餘條結果,清一色與「臺中宣言」有關,細查其實皆出自同一則臺中政府官方英文新聞文章,即本文探討的文章標題。難道「提升GNP」這概念在全人類有英語記錄的歷史中,是臺中市府首推?當然不!更合理的推論是:
一、像樣的英文不是這樣寫。
二、不像樣的這個英文表達,在全宇宙為臺中市府獨創。
這篇文宣,判斷又是不重視翻譯專業的結果。其實,有待批評的英文書寫問題還多著,有興趣的讀者不妨一讀,親自感受一下。
正如不久前逢甲大學一位外國英語教授針對「英語列爲第二官方語言」的計畫投書賴院長,批評這做法是緣木求魚,我也認爲台灣政府各層級應該檢討是否真已準備好,有能力拿出像樣的對內、對外的英語書寫。答案好像不證自明。
以下轉錄臺中官網全文,先是介紹何謂臺中宣言,後是臺中宣言英文版。(連結見留言)
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《Taichung Declaration》has redefined the GNP Promote and raise the proposal for Green, Nature and People
Issued by Information Bureau Date:2018-04-19
Taichung will conduct World Flora Expo in November. Green productivity proposed by the City Government was based on the Flora Expo addressed concepts of Green productivity, Nature sustainability and People with Green-ability.「Taichung Declaration」is aiming for inviting 100 cities to sign up. Taichung City Mayor, Chia-lung Lin has signed the declaration with Changwon City Mayor, Ahn Sang-soo tonight at Masan Baseball Stadium in South Korea, he also kicked off the starting game for the Taiwanese baseball pitcher, Weichung Wang, who is working currently in South Korea. It’s very meaningful to have Changwon City as the first city to sign up to the Taichung Declaration.
The theme of 2018 Taichung World Flora Expo is「Exploring GNP」 which change the old meaning of GNP as Gross National Product. Redefined GNP now means Green productivity, Nature sustainability and People with Green-ability for pursuing green productivity and facilitating the ecological eternity and embrace the nature in addition to pursuing the technological development. to make people’s living better. We wish to promote and raise the awareness of enhanced collaborations between international societies because this is the only way to connect people to help each other for sharing the goodness and prosperity for the world. (4/11*11)*Information Bureau.
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Taichung Declaration:
《Taichung Declaration》
A New Proposal for GNP
Have you ever thought about that, sound of blooming, could be heard?
Modern people are busy in earning their livings when they are pursuing the development of economics and technologies. They’ve been too busy to see things through so they’ve forgotten to listen to the hearts, realize the nature how close they are relying on the environment.
In 2018, let’s find out the balance for ourselves, let’s listen to the whispers of the nature, let’s listen to the happy sounds of the blooming, we can feel the the value of life and how great to be alive. After all, the meaning of life is to make the world better.
2018 Taichung World Flora Expo will raise a new proposal for GNP. GNP has it’s own life and means Green, Nature and People so it is no more a neutral number of Gross National Product. GNP stands for green productivity and facilitating the ecological eternity to make people’s living better.
It’s the time to move forwards, it’s the time to look back to the past. When we move forwards to develop the smart technologies in the future, we should remember to turn to embrace the nature again to facilitate the ecological eternity. We believe the prosperity and environmental protection can exist concurrently while the technologies can live with the nature.
Green Productivity
City in green and green in the city. The economical growth traded off by the environment will no more last as we know quite well how to play the role as one of the members in the global village. By applying green technologies, reducing energy consumption and create the shared resources to construct a sustainable city with green production and green economics as the backbone.
Nature Sustainability
The mountain geography left from the ice age and the recent wetland scenes formed by the waves and tides are all the low polluted ecological environment and diverse biological systems we would like to sustain. We will never pay the price of nature to pursue the technological prosperity again. We will rebuild the tight connections between people and nature to find back the harmony and balance between people and nature.
People with Green-ability
We are anticipating people will develop their green concepts and capabilities. Such trivial things as personal thought, diet, living and action or big scope as urban construction and future development, all of them will become the group energy of Green to contribute to the international society. So-called green concepts is to implement the actions, including respect the varieties and embrace diversity. No matter in the aspects of culture, race, politics, education or religion, we will maintain the old traditions and develop the innovations to share a better future with everyone. The aesthetics of living is to live with varieties and grow with the compatibilities.
We believe,
The perfect balance among production, ecology and living can be obtained.
Listen to the nature, connect with the society and link to the world.
Collaborate and facilitate the development of international non-government organizations.
Create the new model of urban management.
Because we connect with each other,
We will share the achievements and good results.
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forwards中文 在 大英國辦公室小職員 Facebook 的最佳貼文
[職場] 時尚教母X牛津大學=給年經人職場與人生的的四個意見
平常我跟Fashion是完全沒有相關的,但偶然看到Vogue的總編輯Anna Wintour(至少我知道他是誰)到牛津大學演講的翻譯稿,引起了我的興趣,這位穿著Prada的惡魔之教母,到底分享了什麼呢?
我去看了他的演講原影片,畫重點的打了原稿,有興趣練習英文的可以邊聽邊看加上天下的中文搭配使用.我也附上我的感想.
Anna使用的字都不難,也講得頗慢,有趣的是他有好幾次咬了舌頭,教母演說也不是從頭到尾100%的完美.另個有趣的是,原來他是英國人呀!
原文演說影片15分鐘: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WxlrjalADs8
原文Q&A影片23分鐘: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zxBuBJ4cO-4
第一建議: "Please don't become over specialized." (especially in today’s media)
-Try different things. Don't close your mind for other calling.
-University is a place to discover opportunities, meeting different people, open your eyes and different pots.
-It’s crucial to have multiple interests & skills, to try and possible to fail
-Be fearless polymath. Hard working and passionate, creative and curious
-Embrace changes and don’t become too insular
基本上他認為要有專業但是不要只專注於專業上(尤其在媒體環境),應該要保有好奇,嘗試新事情,培養多方面的性與技能.擁抱改變,不要蒙蔽雙眼只專注於自己.
天下文章下了標題”別太專業”,但我覺得是要專業但別過度專業,要做個專業的通才.專業是你還是要有在職場領域的專精,但是也要跨界了解其他領域發生什麼事情,不然怎麼可能會創造新的激發,有新的啟示來豐富自己的生活與職場生涯.並且現在職場很多時機都需要與人合作,如果沒有一些對方領域的知識常識,又怎麼與人溝通.
然後他轉到他剛出道時在倫敦工作,必須自己搞定編輯上的很多事情:
- Become self-sufficient
- Understand how the thing is working
- Open to interruption or new things, not just looking for perfect
還是在同一個專業的主題上,在雜誌編輯上專業,但這中間有很多事情從開頭到結尾他都自己去弄懂,我想是追根究柢的精神吧,不是只做被交付的工作項目.
第二建議:What she is always looking for - “Point of view”.
-Trust and cultivate your tatest. your opinion manners, people want to know what you think and what is your view.
-You have a voice by the choice you make and the way you live.
-You don't want to spend your entire life clicking and liking, we want more actual conversations. Social media is great but don't let it substitute for living.
要有自己的觀點,但是我覺得重點更是要相信與培養個人的品味.怎麼說呢?當酸民發表意見很容易,但是要當個意見領袖,就會需要有多點料了! 因此"觀點"其實是要培養的.
你怎麼過生活,做了什麼決定,就代表了你這個人. 所以身教與無形的舉手投足都是很重要的.
第三建議:“Not to discount experience and training”.
-Work with the best, learn from the best and have freedom to try new thing, making mistake, and perhaps by “pivot”.
-Seek to be relevant,agile and educated
-The more you do, the more you can do.
他強調了經驗與學習的重要性.這個第三點我的直覺反應是不要想著一飛沖天,要累積實力.也想到這句話"站在巨人的肩膀上學習",強者愈強則強. 當你做越多,越能做--這就是能力培養的過程.
Seek to be relevant, agile and educated其實也跟第一點有相關,當你對其他事物保有好奇心與關注,慢慢累積之後,也相形之下能夠應用其中.
第四建議:“Get out yourself from your own ambitions to help other in less fortunate.”
I don’t know how him find time to do so many things, then I do, when you live with intentions, you create a space to achieve true excellent.
他提到了他參與的公益活動與他侄子當志工,公益活動真的在西方世界是比較存在於生活中的,也比較警覺要幫助弱勢.
我喜歡他說的,當你的生活中有意念意向意義,你就會找機會/時間設法把他做好.
另外有同學在Q&A問他認為最重要的leadership是什麼? 他認為是Clarity很重要之一,清楚的指示(be specific)讓下屬知道你期待什麼樣的結果,放手讓下屬去做(to dedicate).並且不要害怕hire與你意見不同的下屬,下屬會挑戰,質疑,不是一直的同意你的意見.
最後是他在Q&A時提到好幾次 You can’t look backwards, you have to live forwards. We deal with future. 雖然他指的是時尚居多,但是人生就是要向前看,以過去為根基,不是嗎?
http://m.cw.com.tw/article/article.action…